Name: Loahisi (Signed) · Date: March 17, 2012 02:18 pm · For: Chapter 2
Ok, I know I already read this story and the next chapter so it's like cheating but the first time I read it. I was feealing really sad because I could sense something was very wrong with Noah. Since they got back together he was always saying he didn't want to lose Luke and here he is walking away from him because he was afraid of him. I'm not a psychologist but I studied it and I could tell the dream were about something that happened to him. and I just hoped that something wasn't to awful.
Author's Response: I'm really cruel to these guys aren't I? LOL... thanks for reading...
Name: neddiheht (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2011 08:05 pm · For: Chapter 2
It's painful to watch the boys at the beginning here... seeing Noah pushing Luke away again. And it's hard because you can tell it's not what Noah wants to do, it's just that he's terrified of what it could mean.
But as awful as it is to watch the boys fight, I think the fight, it works. That Luke would be confrontational and force the issue, and that Noah, new Noah, would really confront the issues not because he's ready, but because he's just THAT terrified of losing Luke.
My reality-meter is straining from the sex in the barn. No lube plus rough sex? They'd hear him squealing from the house. Seriously. Don't get me wrong... I've wanted a romp in the hay from the boys since Luke moaned to his dad about never having the opportunity on the show.
The scene with Holden is exactly what it needs to be.
I love how much of a kid Luke can be... and it really shines in the last scene. But I'm curious... this was clearly planned in advance... before he got the talk from Holden about taking risks, so it made me think about the timing and that not making sense.
Okay okay! I admit! Sometimes I do stretch reality somewhat to get the scene I want... I know... it's writers prerogative okay? LOL I really HATE interupting a LM scene for practicalities... hee hee
Noah is making plans for this future in LA with Luke and I guess buying the house was a symbol of this. Perhaps it's at odds with his current state of mind, I'm not sure...
Name: neddiheht (Signed) · Date: December 18, 2011 07:47 pm · For: Chapter 1
Man... what to say. Your dialogue is getting to that point where I see it in later chapters... much more natural and it's great to see, because it's easier to immerse myself in the story. I get that this chapter is supposed to jump around in the emotions, but I almost feel it does it too much.
I get the start, the revelation that there may be more to Noah's nightmares than the cabin is important.
I couldn't help but feel that the text message conversation might have been stronger with screen names, giving the reader a puzzle to figure out which screenname belonged to which person.
Then the nightmare scene again. And it's good because its necessary, but knowing what's coming, I have to wonder... this is going to be triggering for some folks, in part because you did it well. Have you considered posting warnings in the author's notes?
The ornament bit is nice and ties back into the actual episodes well. The acknowledgement that he was still part of the family, that Luke himself hung the ornament that placed him in the family even when they were apart... I wanted that to be more emotional, but at the same time, with Noah I can believe it not being more, because he holds so much in.
Then we have feel good scenes between Luke and Noah, and these worked... we get a solid impression of Luke and Noah happy together, Luke and Noah happy to be part of the family.
Then you give us a terrifying cliffhanger... And it is terrifying, because even with the glimpse of the nightmares, it's not clear yet what's going on.
I wish I had read some of FicNic's texting fics before I wrote this scene then I might have had a better idea on how to pull it off.
I'm glad you think my dialogue improves. I find conversation one of the hardest things to write... You really have to play the scene out in your head and sometimes I sit for hours trying to come up with the next line.
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2011 05:48 pm · For: Chapter 2
FINALLY! Luke has learned to put his foot down and say ENOUGH! He's learned the hard way that things can fall apart when they don't talk it out, so i'm glad he is standing up for himself. He had to be so scared when Noah kept walking away. Old habits die hard!
Oh boy that barn scene! That was hot!
A house? He bought him a house? Oh geeez! Why can't I ever get a man to do that for me?
I KNOW! Some people get all the luck!
Yip... these first few stories really have them dealing with their old problems and showing how much stronger they are this time round.
Name: buttercup (Signed) · Date: June 12, 2011 05:28 pm · For: Chapter 1
Heart warming to see that even though miles separate them, Luke is right there and can sense when Noah needs him. Thank goodness for cell phones ;o) So good that they're back together for Christmas. Love the stairway scene by the way! Holy crap! What on earth could make Noah scared of Luke? Ok, got to go read chapter 2. You're way too good at this cliffhanger stuff LOL
Wait until you get to Precious Discovery... that one is cliffhanger central! Count yourself lucky that you can read the next chapter right away... because usually I leave people hanging for days! Hee Hee!
Name: daan73 (Signed) · Date: March 27, 2011 03:21 pm · For: Chapter 2
well that was something
a lot happening here
I am glad they understand eachother that whatever will happen they will face it together
loved the talk between noah en holden
and the house WOW!
Yes they are finally able to work things out together...
Name: sgrove (Signed) · Date: March 06, 2011 04:34 pm · For: Chapter 1
Yeah....I now have a place to get my L&N fix...it's like ATWT has continued on. Thanks for this...
Yay! I new reader! LOVE it! Thanks for the comment!
Name: daan73 (Signed) · Date: December 27, 2010 05:48 pm · For: Chapter 2
this was good
really intense how noah had to deal with all of the things happening inside his head
and luke who wouldnt take no for an answer
Name: Santasorted (Signed) · Date: December 16, 2010 03:32 am · For: Chapter 2
Poor guys! Just when they seem to be all sorted something else starts to nag at them! Love how they stick together!
Name: snuke (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 09:51 pm · For: Chapter 2
Luke and Noah would be perfect to have biological children.
A boy like Noah and Luke like a girl.
Maybe... one day... who knows :-) Would be nice...
Name: snuke (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 09:41 pm · For: Chapter 2
My heart is beating like crazy emotion.God it was too perfect.
Ah,my boys so beautiful.
Thanks for that.
Aren't they just stunning! I can't get enough of writing about them... I think it's becoming a bit of an obsession! Hee Hee... Thank you so much for the lovely comment!
Name: sln188 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 06:05 pm · For: Chapter 2
Yes! this segment had me going. Read the first part before I went to work this morning and wondered off and on all day what Noah was so afraid of. So glad that part 2 was up tonite!! Happy to see them working it out and Noah's gift... Perfect! And again- same here!! Luvin' it!!!
Wow! What a complement! I'm so touched!
Name: tammynelson78 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 05:47 pm · For: Chapter 2
It just keeps getting better and better...you are awesome! We need to find out what is wrong with Noah and get him well.....cause these two were made by angels and so belong together. They need to be happy, please have them be happy and I want them to have biological kids together.
Ah... yes angels they are! And I want them together so you don't need to worry about that! :-)
Name: glori572 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 05:38 pm · For: Chapter 2
okay, you scared me for a minute there. thought noah was reverting, so glad he didn't. hoping that you continue this series would really like to know what the hell the nightmares are about and how they involve luke. hoping the next chapter will show them moving into their new home. please continue soon.
Hi glori572! You know I always enjoy reading your comments! Thanks so much for always taking the time to read these!
Name: lety26 (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 01:51 pm · For: Chapter 1
Poor Noah, he needs help :(b but I loved they Snyder family Christmas
I know... I'm a little mean to him... but he's so cute like this... he just makes you want to hug him! Thanks for the cool comment and for the amazing rating!
Name: van-lukefan (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 09:21 am · For: Chapter 2
Loved every thing about this! But what I loved the most was Noah and Holden's talk! Holden know's his son so well. can't wait for more in this series!
Hee hee! Yes I think Holden knows Luke so well! I love their relationship... Thanks for the rating and for commenting! I'm touched!
Name: ficnic (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 08:33 am · For: Chapter 2
Not sure why we all have Noah freaking out this week lol. But I loved your Vulnerable!Noah, and Determined!Luke, who was not going to be pushed away ever again. Awesome.
Hi ficnic! I can't help myself! I just love to write these! Thanks for always taking the time to rate and comment like you do!
Name: ficnic (Signed) · Date: December 02, 2010 05:22 am · For: Chapter 1
Ooh, cliffhanger! I like!
Name: tammynelson78 (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2010 09:48 pm · For: Chapter 1
What is terrifying Noah?! He needs to get professional help soon. Please don't leave us in suspense too long before an update. Please don't have Noah leave Luke again........it won't be fair and they both need to be together in happiness.
I think the boys will work something out... I have faith! :)
Name: glori572 (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2010 09:43 pm · For: Chapter 1
WTH!!! get away from who "luke?" no, poor noah, there is no way he'd ever want to get away from luke. okay, no i'm fully and utterly dying to know what he's been having nightmares about. and also hoping the boys will finally be together for good. please continue soon.
LOL! You do make me giggle! I love how much you love the boys! So cute! Thanks for the comment!
Name: van-lukefan (Signed) · Date: December 01, 2010 05:44 pm · For: Chapter 1
I'v just read your whole LA series and want to tell you how much I'v enjoyed it! SORRY if I have not commented before. Can't wait for part 2 and any more in this series! Thank's for a great Nuke story!
Hi and welcome to the LA Series! I'm so glad to hear that you have enjoyed my stories! Thanks also for taking the time to rate and comment! It means a lot! I hope part 2 lives up to your expectations!